Paragraph Revision

Activity: Read a paragraph and look for the mistakes. Afther the page would teache you how to change the mistakes

This is the paragraph just as I readed.

Green house effect is one of the phenomena caused by industrial pollution. From the data taken by scientists, our earth has been warming up since the Industrial Revolution. Why does it happen? The factories' emissions have created smog on the atmosphere. The earth's atmosphere becomes like a green house, and the earth and everything inside of it have become like the plants in the green house. The sunlight can pass trough the ozone layer but the heat transferred by the sunlight can not escape easily from the layer of smog and is deflected to earth's surface again.

this is the correct one:

The greenhouse effect is a phenomenon caused by industrial pollution. Because of the greenhouse effect, the temperature of the earth is increasing. According to the data taken by scientists, our earth has been warming up since the Industrial Revolution. Why does it happen? Emissions from factories have created smog in the atmosphere. The earth's atmosphere becomes like a greenhouse, and the earth and everything inside of it have become like the plants in a greenhouse. The sunlight can pass through the ozone layer but the heat transferred by the sunlight can not escape easily from the layer of smog and is deflected to the earth's surface again.


Reflecction: this was very helpeful because there were some mistakes that i didn't notice and it will help me to improve my writting skills

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